Comments for Danclark624's Weblog http://danclark624.wordpress.com Sending his thoughts to a beloved maid Wed, 05 Mar 2008 22:07:59 +0000 http://wordpress.com/ hourly 1 Comment on About by bibomedia.com http://danclark624.wordpress.com/about/#comment-11 bibomedia.com Wed, 05 Mar 2008 22:07:59 +0000 #comment-11 :) :)

]]> Comment on In living colour… by mohawkonline http://danclark624.wordpress.com/2008/02/24/in-living-colour/#comment-10 mohawkonline Tue, 04 Mar 2008 14:44:00 +0000 http://danclark624.wordpress.com/?p=10#comment-10 Hey Dan! Well done. Nice to hear about the Mat Sundin trade. Love your background! :) A few comments: -Would be nice to hear you get a bit more animated in your tone. A little less monotone would make it more interesting for your viewers. -Try to speak in a way that would enlighten people who don't know about the Sundin trade. Pretend you're explaining it to someone who hasn't heard about it... would make it a bit more 'meaty' if you will. Tags were good, description on YouTube was good and you hit all the topics in your video blog. Headline...hmmm.. not so great. Remember that you're pulling readers into your post with the headline - don't you think it would've been better to reference what you're talking about - ie. the Mat Sundin issue as opposed to referencing the media used to tell the story? Good work! Look forward to the next one. 7/9 Roz Hey Dan!

Well done. Nice to hear about the Mat Sundin trade. Love your background! :)

A few comments:

-Would be nice to hear you get a bit more animated in your tone. A little less monotone would make it more interesting for your viewers.
-Try to speak in a way that would enlighten people who don’t know about the Sundin trade. Pretend you’re explaining it to someone who hasn’t heard about it… would make it a bit more ‘meaty’ if you will.

Tags were good, description on YouTube was good and you hit all the topics in your video blog. Headline…hmmm.. not so great. Remember that you’re pulling readers into your post with the headline – don’t you think it would’ve been better to reference what you’re talking about – ie. the Mat Sundin issue as opposed to referencing the media used to tell the story?

Good work! Look forward to the next one.

7/9

Roz

]]> Comment on 2.0: A Web Odyssey by mohawkonline http://danclark624.wordpress.com/2008/02/10/20-a-web-odyssey/#comment-5 mohawkonline Sun, 10 Feb 2008 20:46:10 +0000 http://danclark624.wordpress.com/?p=8#comment-5 Hi Dan! Good blog post. Would have been nice to see you explore your own feelings about Web 2.0 a little further. Why is it terrifying and confusing? What things about it terrify you? Could it be possible that your fear is getting in the way of fully experiencing what Web 2.0 has to offer? :) The link was a bit confusing - I found that it didn't do much to expand your discussion, was kind of just a random link to a blog called 'web 2.0'. In future when linking, make sure that your links are leading readers to a furthering of your discussion in some way. Well done! 6/8 Hi Dan!

Good blog post.

Would have been nice to see you explore your own feelings about Web 2.0 a little further. Why is it terrifying and confusing? What things about it terrify you? Could it be possible that your fear is getting in the way of fully experiencing what Web 2.0 has to offer? :)

The link was a bit confusing – I found that it didn’t do much to expand your discussion, was kind of just a random link to a blog called ‘web 2.0′. In future when linking, make sure that your links are leading readers to a furthering of your discussion in some way.

Well done!

6/8

]]> Comment on And the award for best hardcore thrash metal album goes to…Simpson’s Christmas Boogie? by mohawkonline http://danclark624.wordpress.com/2008/01/27/and-the-award-for-best-hardcore-thrash-metal-album-goes-tosimpsons-christmas-boogie/#comment-4 mohawkonline Mon, 04 Feb 2008 16:10:17 +0000 http://danclark624.wordpress.com/2008/01/27/and-the-award-for-best-hardcore-thrash-metal-album-goes-tosimpsons-christmas-boogie/#comment-4 Hi Dan! Well done on your social networking assignment! Excellent job on the del.icio.us widget! 9/9 Roz Hi Dan!

Well done on your social networking assignment! Excellent job on the del.icio.us widget!

9/9

Roz

]]> Comment on And the award for best hardcore thrash metal album goes to…Simpson’s Christmas Boogie? by mohawkonline http://danclark624.wordpress.com/2008/01/27/and-the-award-for-best-hardcore-thrash-metal-album-goes-tosimpsons-christmas-boogie/#comment-3 mohawkonline Mon, 28 Jan 2008 14:48:16 +0000 http://danclark624.wordpress.com/2008/01/27/and-the-award-for-best-hardcore-thrash-metal-album-goes-tosimpsons-christmas-boogie/#comment-3 Hi Dan! Well done. You're getting closer to online writing style with this post. Good use of conversational style and it's nice to hear your opinion! A few comments: -You did lose a mark for not having a related link within the body of your post. In this instance, an easy link for you would have been to the list of nominated actors. -Next time try to infuse a bit more lively approach to your discussion. Pick something you're really passionate about and write about that. Good work! 8/10 Roz Hi Dan!

Well done. You’re getting closer to online writing style with this post. Good use of conversational style and it’s nice to hear your opinion!

A few comments:

-You did lose a mark for not having a related link within the body of your post. In this instance, an easy link for you would have been to the list of nominated actors.
-Next time try to infuse a bit more lively approach to your discussion. Pick something you’re really passionate about and write about that.

Good work!

8/10

Roz

]]> Comment on And boom goes the car by mohawkonline http://danclark624.wordpress.com/2008/01/22/and-boom-goes-the-car/#comment-2 mohawkonline Wed, 23 Jan 2008 14:20:46 +0000 http://danclark624.wordpress.com/2008/01/22/and-boom-goes-the-car/#comment-2 Hey Dan! Good first post. :) Is this a story you did for the paper? For your next post, keep in mind the elements of online writing style we talked about. Conversational in nature, opinion, and links to other sites. Don't forget to change your about page! Cheers! Roz Hey Dan!

Good first post. :) Is this a story you did for the paper?

For your next post, keep in mind the elements of online writing style we talked about. Conversational in nature, opinion, and links to other sites.

Don’t forget to change your about page!

Cheers!

Roz

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